Week Six - Peer Response Two - Response to Pauline's "Free Write"

Sign Inventory

Keep door closed
No shirt—no shoes—no service
No food allowed
Please use other door
All deliveries at rear
No smoking
Caution
Slow
Yield
Stop
Wet Floor
Blind drive
Bridge ices in winter
Neighborhood watch
Hospital
Church
City center
Roundabout.
Do Not Enter
Deer crossing
Watch for Children
Falling rocks
Dead End
Open
Closed
Turn cell phones off
Private
Be back at ?
Drive-thru
Keep out
Keep off grass
Pay here
Correct change only
Start
Save as
Don’t save
Restart
Turn off
Log in
Sign out
End Program

Neat idea, Pauline. I was thinking today about road construction jargon, actually. Without a doubt, you've got a pretty cool found-like poem available with this material. I'm sure you've heard it before, but it's definitely reminiscent of George Carlin's "Modern Man": http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hkCR-w3AYOE&feature=related

I know you've got a great grasp on language and I think you could definitely pull something like this off. In my opinion, you have to be careful about being obviously socially didactic. Some people are in to that, but don’t let it guide your poem before you even get the words out.

Anyways, I’d love to see you do something like this in a tight, short-lined, frequently enjambed poem.